Noblesse Key

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Wednesday, June 20, 2012

Key's Poetry



Poisoned

Intoxicated with every music you play,
You took my sanity away.

Ripples in the water guide my way,
But darkness in disguise lead me astray.

To the rhythm you make I sway,
Reality I knew for you was play.

Rainbow melodies tainted with gray,
Swift as sword you cut and slay.

Hope is smashed like molded clay,
Left me speechless no words to say.

Slowly killing me day by day,
Inhannilate me you may. 

In a bed of pain I stay,
With my bleeding heart I lay. 






The poem was a little bit heavy so here's a photo mosaic to lighten things up. Anyway, I was making this poem while eating at Mc Donald's. I do not know where the words or the topic came from. I hope you liked my second stroke on poetry. 



18 comments:

  1. You're good in poetry..continue doing this

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  2. nice...pangalawa mo palang ito na naisulat na poem.....sulat ka pa ng iba pa...

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    1. yup, I have a lot of blogger friends who are good in poetry so I need courage to post one...ahahahahah

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  3. not bad at all :) nice photo mosaic too...

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    1. Thanks ashok...I like my photos too..ahahahaha

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  4. I like that poetry, and those pictures! BURGER!!! yummy!!

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    1. Thanks Dark angel...I like the burger as well...ahahahahah

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  5. I was reading this last night and was surprised that you wrote poetry... where's the link to your first one? (I'd love to read it :)

    The best ones for me are those I could hum :P And since the lines rhyme so well, it's easier to sing ;)

    I like McDo too :) I thought that was a print ad you made for them :P

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    1. Hmmm... rereading it again. It's entitled poisoned...and you were eating.

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    2. Here's the link to my first poem...http://noblessekey.blogspot.com/2012/04/drum-rolls-here-goes-my-poem-i-have.html

      But the first one is not rhyming.ahahahahha..

      I'm really happy that you're "rereading it"..hahahahahaha

      The print ad is in exchange for the Wifi. ;)

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    3. Thanks Key :) Will be reading this when I get back from work :)

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  6. love the sonnet...haha! (is it a sonnet?)

    love the picture..and love McDonald's!!

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    1. I don't know what it is..poetry is not strength..

      I'm just happy that you liked it.

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  7. It's only your second attempt and yet you have managed to grasp the intensity of poetry. I loved reading it. <3

    There are a lot of amazing elements in it such as the usage of the same rhyme scheme from start to end, the natural flow of words, the deep emotions, the fluidity and most of all it brings out that side of you which (in my opinion) you cover up a lot. That's one of the biggest charms of poetry. It lets us divulge in the emotions which we wouldn't usually show and yet these emotions always want an escape.

    A good dose of dark poetry is enticing for me and you have nailed this one. I look forward to more. I suggest that you visit McDonald's more often so that you end up putting in such amazing compositions. :)

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    1. As much as I want to deny it, it's true that I'm not an all smile type of person. I guess I just unconsciously released it. You really can read through me.

      I am really happy that you appreciated this poem. I'll certainly be at Mc Donald's more often.ahahahahahah

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  8. The best poems are created by the subconscious mind.. :) they are honest and touching..same with what you created here.. double thumbs up!
    I love mcdonalds tooo

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    1. really? oh, that's knew...thank you for visiting my page ;)

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